I’m once again joining the word witch, Colleen Chesebro, weekly poetry challenge, #photoprompt. I came up with three different Haikus for this photo as I played with words. Here is my favorite that turned into a #Senryu.

ENVY

Train of assured thoughts

Veers off the parallel tracks

I’m green with envy

22 Comments

  1. Meenakshi

    September 7, 2020 at 3:14 am

    Thank you, Lisa.

  2. anna

    September 4, 2020 at 5:30 am

    i love the ending you are great

  3. Chrys Fey

    September 3, 2020 at 8:59 am

    Aw. I loved your haiku. And that photo is stunning. (I am green with envy.)

    • lisa

      September 3, 2020 at 12:57 pm

      Thanks, Chrys! One of the writers who does the poetry challenge regularly chose the photo. It is thought provoking. I got to choose the photo for the next challenge coming up this month. 🙂 Yes, that green…!!

  4. Suzanne @ The Bookish Libra

    August 31, 2020 at 5:53 pm

    I really love this one!

    • lisa

      September 2, 2020 at 9:36 am

      Thank you, Suzanne 😀

  5. Jeff

    August 28, 2020 at 3:16 pm

    Nice and I love that photo (there is something about train tracks that excite me)

    • lisa

      August 28, 2020 at 10:11 pm

      Thanks, Jeff. Yeah, many have commented about the image and the train tracks. I guess they ignite our imagination. 🙂

  6. Traci Kenworth

    August 22, 2020 at 6:26 pm

    Nice!

    • lisa

      August 23, 2020 at 1:40 pm

      Thanks!

  7. sally cronin

    August 22, 2020 at 3:28 am

    Terrific Senryu Lisa.. and excellent response to the prompt..x

    • lisa

      August 22, 2020 at 10:32 am

      Aw, thank you Sally! 😀

  8. Marcia @ Menopausal Mother

    August 21, 2020 at 1:47 pm

    Oooohhh I like this a lot. Totally relatable right now!

    • lisa

      August 22, 2020 at 10:32 am

      Thank you, Marcia! 😀

  9. Colleen

    August 20, 2020 at 12:12 pm

    Lisa, you totally understood the concept of the implied metaphor. Well done on this Senryu! I love it! <3

    • lisa

      August 20, 2020 at 3:53 pm

      Aw, thank you, Colleen! <3 I wrote 3 Haikus but I liked this one the best 😛

      • Colleen

        August 21, 2020 at 10:23 am

        It’s the best! The last line is the surprise! You incorporated color… I love that and the meaning fits this piece so well. <3

        • lisa

          August 21, 2020 at 10:54 am

          Thank you, Colleen! High praise coming from you 🙂 Appreciate the feedback.

  10. Marie Kléber

    August 20, 2020 at 1:28 am

    I didn’t know this type of poetry Lisa!
    Really lovely.

    • lisa

      August 20, 2020 at 9:01 am

      Me either, Marie. I’ve been learning about the Haiku and its cousins. Syllabic poetry is a challenge but a good brain tease. Thanks for stopping by, Marie 🙂

  11. D.L. Finn

    August 19, 2020 at 1:34 pm

    This is great, Lisa! I love how you twisted the color in at the end:)

    • lisa

      August 19, 2020 at 2:25 pm

      Thanks, Denise. 😀

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