Today I’m responding to Colleen Chesebro’s Poetry Challenge Prompt: Circle of Life. The following is a form of Haiku, called a Senryu in a 3/5/3 syllable structure.
I had to look up these poetry definitions, too. I am more a free verse girl, when it comes to writing poetry. However, joining this challenge was a good brain bender. This kind of writing has a way of tweaking word patterns. I confess that I used the Syllable Counter because counting syllables quickly had me questioning my English language skills. *insert laugh track*
If you love to write poetry, do pop over to Colleen’s site to find out more about or join, her Tanka Tuesday Poetry Challenges.
CIRCLE OF LIFE
Apple falls
Nearer the tree
Than I knew
I am you
And you could be me
Certainly
My journey
Ironic ending
Circles me
I said I wrote a Haiku. I didn’t say it was good. Learning…
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Christy B
February 8, 2020 at 12:15 pmIt sounds tough with the syllable counts! I think you did great 🙂 Circles are all around…
lisa
February 9, 2020 at 9:46 amThank you, Christy. The syllable count quickly takes over the idea of the poem…not a good thing. Circles are inevitable 🙂
Tamara
February 7, 2020 at 6:30 pmActually, I think they’re great! I’m so used to the 5/7/5 format that this seems super challenging. I love this.
lisa
February 9, 2020 at 9:44 amYes, there’s the 5/7/5 you can do. not sure which is harder 😀 Thank you, Tamara!
jane thrive
February 7, 2020 at 11:33 amYay for haiku poetry! I like them!!!! <3 <3 <3 I really like the apple one. *hugs*!!!!
lisa
February 11, 2020 at 8:42 amHi Jane, ha! Yes, haiku…<3 must play with more words to make some more profound poetry LOL. Thank you xx
Suzanne @ The Bookish Libra
February 6, 2020 at 5:36 pmMy son is learning about haikus in school right now so it was fun to come on your blog and see you writing them as well. I think your first attempt is quite wonderful. 🙂
lisa
February 7, 2020 at 9:05 amAw, that’s awesome. I bet kids grasp this poetry faster than us old dogs LOL. Counting syllables tho…not the funnest thing. Thank you so much, Suzanne 🙂
Chrys Fey
February 6, 2020 at 3:13 pmI struggle to write haiku but love to read it.
“I am you
And you could be me
Certainly”
I love that!
lisa
February 6, 2020 at 5:43 pm🙂 It’s my first real try on a poetry challenge…not the best result LOL. Thank you for your compliment, Chrys! I have a better appreciation for reading haiku now.
Jeff
February 6, 2020 at 7:47 amNice attempt. They all have a singular purpose that holds them together. I should check out that challenge.
lisa
February 6, 2020 at 9:38 amHi Jeff, do you mean each line of the poem “have a singular purpose that holds them together”? Yes, check out the challenge. Colleen creates new poetry challenges each Tuesday.
Jeff
February 6, 2020 at 11:26 amNo, each line is a separate thought, but the three hold together to a more developed idea (if that makes sense).
lisa
February 6, 2020 at 11:46 amOh. Yes, that makes sense…thanks, Jeff 🙂
Marie Kléber
February 6, 2020 at 1:10 amWell done Lisa!
I believe that following rules in poetry is the hardest part.
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
lisa
February 6, 2020 at 9:39 amThank you, Marie <3 It is hard to follow the rules. You make it look easy.
DGKaye
February 5, 2020 at 5:27 pmHi LIs. Wonderful first attempt. I know it’s confusing at first but it creates discipline writing syllabic. Just remember to keep your syllables in tact. Great to see you join Colleen’s challenge. <3
lisa
February 5, 2020 at 6:05 pmWell, thank you so much, Deb. It is confusing and indeed it is tricky. Thanks for the tip and encouragement, Deb. I appreciate that 😀 :p
Balroop Singh
February 5, 2020 at 8:45 amHi Lisa, lovely attempt! I like free verse, as writing within the syllables is quite challenging. Whenever I try, I like to break a few rules. 🙂 idea gets lost if we follow them.
lisa
February 5, 2020 at 11:52 amThank you, Balroop. And I agree. Free verse is more FUN. Exactly, the idea does get lost in the syllable count—argh. It was a great brain exercise but not my favorite. I don’t have the poetic writing chops for Haiku—yet. Maybe in time and with more practice. 🙂
Colleen
February 4, 2020 at 12:35 pmWell done on your Haiku trio, Lisa. I do like where you went with this theme. Actually, in the scheme of things your poetry is considered as Senryu – anything that has to do with the human condition falls into that category. Haiku are nature based. I especially like that you used the more current form. The brevity of your words are special. <3
lisa
February 7, 2020 at 9:08 amHi Colleen, sorry I’m late to see your comment. It went into my spam folder :p :p :p Thank you so much for your positive feedback! I was going for the Senryu, so I’m glad to hear I got that down. xx.